Hey! Thank you so much for the feedback it's really helpful to get critiques like this. I get what you're saying about having some more straight edge classic overachiever dialouge and I'll definitely try to work on that. I've got a few player character archetypes that I'm still trying to flesh out.
As for the talk with Cameron, it's more so about his past experiences with some of his friends, than how he really views the MC. I do think this conversation could use some more choices and outcomes though.
All in all, you've given me a lot to think about and I'm really glad you cared enough to give me your honest first impressions.
Thank so much! Yes it does stop in the middle of the party, I had intended to get more completed but ran out of time. The next update will have the rest of the prologue and the first day of chapter 1.